My offering this week comes from "Lilly's story" (I so need to think of a title) and immediately follows this previous snippet.
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“Shit!” She screamed the expletive
involuntarily. The small screens showing
the energy signatures and visible light pictures from outside the hull had
depixelated once the Dremikian craft popped out of the jump conduit—and promptly filled with
the intimidating mass of a very large
ship. “What the hell is that thing?”
“Human
female, state your name and the purpose for your travels,” droned a decidedly
non-human voice from the communications relay.
“Uh,
Federal....er...Lilly Diaz. I’m the new security chief for Rhiadan Sanctuary.”
“You
affirm that you are a passenger aboard this vessel of your own free will and
are under no duress or encumbrance?”
Well that’s kind of a loaded question; what are these things, the inter-galactic
lawyers? She blinked as the realization came to her that she was, in fact,
speaking to the only force of law in this part of the Universe. Just great--big, scary, Kigvans in big, scary, ships. 
Ah, I'd recognize customs and immigration officials anywhere...haha! :-)
ReplyDeleteMy favorite word in the snippet - depixelated. A lot going on here and it starts with an expletive. One word and we know something just went wrong or is about to. The equivalent of an inter-galatic traffic stop.
ReplyDeleteYeah my spell check HATES that word. Thanks for reading.
DeleteDefinitely sounds like customs and immigration. Funny how, no matter where in the world or universe, they still come across the same way. Good stuff!! Good luck on the title.
ReplyDeleteKigvan's are scary. I'm not sure they came across quite as intimidating as I meant for them to, in "Dremiks", so in this book the reader gets to see a lot more of the bad-ass qualities.
DeleteLove this snippet! I would have to agree with everyone else in that they definitely come across as customs officials. Worked with them regularly for a little over 2 years.
ReplyDeleteGood luck on getting a title!
INS!! HIDE!! Love it! Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteI conducted a poll to get the title to SP.
Good conflict. Seems like she knows these guys are scary. reminds me of how you don't mess with Mounties at the border!
ReplyDeleteGreat set-up here. Galactic police force? That's terrifying all in itself. But hearing it from her pov is very effective. Looking forward to more from Lilly's story.
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